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写文书没有思路?看谷爱凌的“文书”是怎么打动斯坦福的?

7月初,奥运冠军谷爱凌同学已经在斯坦福大学完成大一学年了,保持着全A的成绩,拿到了52个学分!不得不说,这真是恐怖的学习能力,毕竟她还有无数安排的满满当当的行程,全球到处飞~真是瑞思拜啦!

一年之前,很多人都觉得凭借奥运冠军的身份地位,谷爱凌进斯坦福是必然,但实际上并不是这样,小谷同学的实力可谓是真正全面且均衡,天才少女名副其实。

虽然我们不可能知道谷爱凌申请斯坦福的那篇文书,但她曾在纽约时报发表了一篇文章,对于美本申请的同学而言,完全可以作为文书来看,而且真的很会写!!!现在,2024美本申请季的大幕已经拉开,当季申请的同学是不是都在奋笔疾书呢?如果你对自己的主文书还是没有太好的思路,一定要往下看....

今天,我们就来全面分析下谷爱凌的“文书”,相信读完之后你一定会恍然大悟:文书最重要的就是挖掘自己特色,突出自己和大学的契合度,完全不是套用模版,从千千万万文书中能脱颖而出,就是因为你的独特性!

先贴一下原文和翻译,没有看过的同学请仔细阅读一下。

可以看到,谷爱凌以第一视角的自述文中,她向我们展示了她是如何通过极限运动来战胜恐惧的。所以,这篇文书的主题切入点就是【如何克服并战胜恐惧】,她通过很多事件来串联起这个故事,展现出当时的内心历程。文书中没有直接吹嘘自己,却流露出主动、大胆和应对压力的个性特质,敢于追求梦想,敢于迎接挑战,这种坚韧的精神在文书中得以展现。需要注意的是,文书绝对不是简单地罗列经历,而是要重点强调个人经历,让主次分明。问自己几百个问题,挖掘你自己内心深处的动机和激情,或许会发现一个你自己都不在意的出发点,这将成为你与别人不同的突破口。同时,也不要用空洞的虚词堆砌文章,细节才是最打动人的地方。比如,谷爱凌写出了在空中的感受,从情绪的递进到动作的分解,仿佛一幅画面就在我们眼前掠过。

这就是打动人的核心秘诀,文书不应冷冰冰,像学术论文一样,而是要让招生官感受到你是个活生生的人。美国顶尖名校一直在孜孜不倦寻找两类人:一类是在未来能够取得改变世界的成就的学生;另一类是那些很有可能在学校时为他们的社区做出贡献的学生,以及能够帮助其他学生做出伟大成就的学生。

实话实说,大多数人难以成为第一类,所以让学校确认你是第二类人也是成功的重要原因。

因此,在藤校录取的文书中,热情、领导力、创造力、学术成就等等都是最常见的题材。不过也要注意的是,大学不仅仅需要看文书的内容,还较为看重文书语言质量,如果学生的申请文书能接近SAT阅读文章的写作风格和用词风格,在申请中会占优势。

此外,不同大学也有自己的一些小偏好,比如,波士顿大学喜欢多样化推陈出新较为怪异的申请文书,而东北大学更喜欢正常的文书。

此外,还有不少大学会有自己的补充文书题目,通常也被叫做“小文书”,这份文书同样也需要非常重视,但思路上要稍微有些变化。概况来说,小文书并不是个独立的存在,它与主文书有一定的关联性,所以写好小文书的三个重点是:标签塑造、细节把控,以及目标陈述。

也就是说,小文书不仅要表现申请人的学术能力、个性和反思、与梦校的匹配度,也要与主文书互相补充、互不冲突,最好能兼具个性与深度原则。

最后,我们再来了解已经公布2024 Fall补充文书题目的都有哪些Top 30大学,以及文书题目都是什么。

芝加哥大学补充文书

与往年不同,今年芝大在必答题之外,不再是六选一文书题目,而是提供了七个Extended Essay!

Question 1(必答)

How does the University of Chicago,as you know it now,satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning,community,and future?Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.

翻译:根据你的了解,芝加哥大学是如何满足你对于学习、社区,以及未来的期望的?请具体说明你自己的期望,并解释它们与芝加哥大学的关系。

Question 2:Extended Essay(选其一)

Essay Option 1

Exponents and square roots,pencils and erasers,beta decay and electron capture.Name two things that undo each other and explain why both are necessary.

翻译:指数和平方根、铅笔和橡皮、β衰变和电子俘获。说出两件相互“抵消”的事情,并解释为什么两者都是必要的。

Essay Option 2

“Where have all the flowers gone?”–Pete Seeger.Pick a question from a song title or lyric and give it your best answer.

翻译:“那些花儿都去哪儿了?”——彼得西格。从歌曲标题或歌词中选择一个问题,并给出你最好的回答。

Essay Option 3

“Vlog,”“Labradoodle,”and“Fauxmage.”Language is filled with portmanteaus.Create a new portmanteau and explain why those two things are a“patch”(perfect match).

翻译:“Vlog”、“Labradoodle”和“Fauxmage”。语言充满了混合词。创造一个新的混合词,并解释为什么这两个词完美匹配。

Essay Option 4

A jellyfish is not a fish.Cat burglars don’t burgle cats.Rhode Island is not an island.Write an essay about some other misnomer,and either come up with and defend a new name for it or explain why its inaccurate name should be kept.

翻译:水母(jellyfish)不是鱼(fish),飞贼(Cat burglars)不会偷窃猫(burgle cats),罗德岛(Rhode Island)不是一个岛(island)。写一篇关于其他“用词不当”的文章,要么为其想出一个新名称并为其辩护,要么解释为什么应保留其不准确的名称。

Essay Option 5

Despite their origins in the Gupta Empire of India or Ancient Egypt,games like chess or bowling remain widely enjoyed today.What modern game do you believe will withstand the test of time,and why?

翻译:尽管它们起源于印度笈多帝国或古埃及,但国际象棋或保龄球等游戏至今仍广受喜爱。您认为哪种现代游戏能够经受住时间的考验,为什么?

Essay Option 6

There are unwritten rules that everyone follows or has heard at least once in their life.But of course,some rules should be broken or updated.What is an unwritten rule that you wish didn’t exist?(Our custom is to have five new prompts each year,but this year we decided to break with tradition.Enjoy!)

翻译:每个人一生中都遵循或至少听过一次不成文的规则/潜规则。但当然,有些规则应该被打破或更新。您希望不存在的不成文规则是什么?(我们的习惯是每年有五个新提示,但今年我们决定打破传统。享受吧!)

Essay Option 7

And,as always…the classic choose your own adventure option!In the spirit of adventurous inquiry,choose one of our past prompts(or create a question of your own).Be original,creative,thought provoking.Draw on your best qualities as a writer,thinker,visionary,social critic,sage,citizen of the world,or future citizen of the University of Chicago;take a little risk,and have fun!

翻译:并且,一如既往……本着冒险探究的精神,选择过去的题目之一(或创建一个自己的问题)。具有原创性、创造性、发人深省。发挥你作为作家、思想家、梦想家、社会批评家、智者、世界公民或芝加哥大学未来学生的最佳品质。冒一点风险,享受乐趣!

达特茅斯补充文书

2024 Fall入学申请,达特茅斯学院补充文书的第二道必答题比去年增加了一道,可以二选一,另外还新增了三道题目。

达特茅斯学院要求申请人对以下三个附加文书题目进行简短的回答。

1.所有申请人均须撰写,全文不超过100字:

Dartmouth celebrates the ways in which its profound sense of place informs its profound sense of purpose.As you seek admission to Dartmouth's Class of 2028,what aspects of the College's academic program,community,and/or campus environment attract your interest?In short,why Dartmouth?

翻译:申请进入达特茅斯,学院的学术计划、社区和/或校园环境的哪些方面吸引了你的兴趣?简而言之,为什么是达特茅斯?

2.所有申请人都需要撰写。

请选择以下文书题目之一并用200-250字回答:

A.There is a Quaker saying:Let your life speak.Describe the environment in which you were raised and the impact it has had on the person you are today.

翻译:贵格会有一句格言:让你的生活说话。描述您成长的环境以及它如何塑造今天的你。

B."Be yourself,"Oscar Wilde advised."Everyone else is taken."Introduce yourself.

翻译:“做你自己,”奥斯卡·王尔德建议道。“因为别人都有人做了。”

3.所有申请人都需要回答以下提示之一,

字数不超过250字:

A.What excites you?

翻译:什么让你兴奋?

B.Labor leader and civil rights activist Dolores Huerta recommended a life of purpose."We must use our lives to make the world a better place to live,not just to acquire things,"she said."That is what we are put on the earth for."In what ways do you hope to make—or are you already making—an impact?Why?How?

翻译:劳工领袖和民权活动家多洛雷斯·韦尔塔建议过有目标的生活。她说:“我们必须用我们的生活让世界变得更美好,而不仅仅是为了获得东西”。“这就是我们被安置在地球上的目的。”你希望以什么方式产生影响,或者你已经产生了影响?为什么?怎样产生的?

C.Dr.Seuss,aka Theodor Geisel of Dartmouth's Class of 1925,wrote,"Think and wonder.Wonder and think."As you wonder and think,what's on your mind?

翻译:苏斯博士,也就是1925年达特茅斯班的西奥多·盖塞尔,写道:“思考和好奇。好奇且思考。”你会对什么感到好奇且思考?

D.Celebrate your nerdy side.

翻译:赞美你“书呆子”的一面。

E."It's not easy being green…"was the frequent refrain of Kermit the Frog.How has difference been a part of your life,and how have you embraced it as part of your identity and outlook?

翻译:“身为环保人士并不容易……”是青蛙科米特经常重复的一句话。差异是如何成为你生活的一部分的,你是如何将其作为你身份和观点的一部分?

F.As noted in the College's mission statement,"Dartmouth educates the most promising students and prepares them for a lifetime of learning and of responsible leadership…"Promise and potential are important aspects of the assessment of any college application,but they can be elusive qualities to capture.Highlight your potential and promise for us;what would you like us to know about you?

翻译:正如学院的使命声明中所指出的,“达特茅斯教育最有前途的学生,让他们为终身学习和负责任的领导做好准备……”承诺和潜力是评估任何大学申请的重要方面,但它们可能是难以捉摸的品质。突出您对我们的潜力和承诺;你想让我们了解你什么?

康奈尔大学补充文书

康奈尔大学补充文书会根据申请的院校不同,附加文书题也不尽相同。

1.农业和生命科学学院

Required:Why are you drawn to studying the major you have selected?Please discuss how your interests and related experiences have influenced your choice.How will an education from the College of Agriculture and Life Sciences(CALS)at Cornell University specifically serve to support your learning,growth,and the pursuit of your goals?

翻译:(必答)你为什么要学习你选择的专业?请讨论您的兴趣和相关经历如何影响您的选择。康奈尔大学农业与生命科学学院(CALS)的教育将如何具体支持你的学习、成长和追求目标?(限制650字)

Optional:At Cornell CALS,we aim to leave the world better than we found it,so we seek those who are not simply driven to master their discipline,but who are also passionate about doing so to serve the public good.Please elaborate on an activity or experience you have had that made an impact on a community that is important to you.We encourage you to think about community broadly—this could include family,school,local,and global communities(200-word limit)

翻译:(选答)在康奈尔大学CALS,我们的目标是让世界变得比我们发现的更好,所以我们寻找那些不仅有动力掌握自己的学科,而且热衷于为公共利益服务的人。请详细说明你对人们、社区和/或对你重要的环境产生了有意义影响的经历。

Optional:Cornell CALS is dedicated to purpose-driven study of the agricultural,life,environmental,and social sciences and welcomes students with interests that span a wide variety of disciplines.Given our agricultural history and commitment to educating the next generation of agriculturalists,please share if you have a background or interest in agriculture,regardless of your intended major.An"agricultural entity"for the purpose of this question is defined as cultivating soil,growing crops,and raising livestock(ex.farm,ranch,greenhouse,vineyard,etc.).(200-word limit)

翻译:(选答)康奈尔大学CALS致力于以目标为导向的农业、生命、环境和社会科学研究,并欢迎有兴趣跨越各种学科的学生。请问你是否对农业有兴趣。

如果申请生在前两篇可选短文中没有任何感兴趣的,那么也可以在此处根据需要进行扩展。

A primary source of income for my parent/guardian(s)comes from ownership of or employment by an agricultural entity.

我的父母/监护人的主要收入来源来自农业实体的所有权或就业。

My extended family owns or operates an agricultural entity.

我的大家庭拥有或经营一个农业实体。

I have experience working in an agricultural entity.

我有在农业实体工作的经验。

I have interest in pursuing a career in an agricultural entity.

我有兴趣追求在一个农业实体的职业生涯。

2.建筑、艺术和规划学院

How do your interests directly connect with your intended major at the College of Architecture,Art,and Planning(AAP)?Why architecture(B.Arch),art(BFA),or urban and regional studies(URS)?B.Arch applicants,please provide an example of how a creative project or passion sparks your motivation to pursue a 5-year professional degree program.BFA applicants may want to to consider how they could integrate a range of interests and available resources at Cornell into a coherent art practice.URS students may want to emphasize their enthusiasm and depth of interest in the study of urban and regional issues.

翻译:你的兴趣与你在建筑艺术与规划学院(AAP)的专业有何直接联系?为什么选择建筑学、艺术或城市与区域研究领域?请举例说明一个创意项目如何激发你攻读5年专业学位课程的动力。BFA申请者可能想要考虑如何将康奈尔大学的兴趣和可用资源整合到一个连贯的艺术实践中。URS的学生可能希望强调他们对城市和区域问题研究的热情和兴趣深度。

3.文理学院

At the College of Arts and Sciences,curiosity will be your guide.Discuss how your passion for learning is shaping your academic journey,and what areas of study or majors excite you and why.Your response should convey how your interests align with the College,and how you would take advantage of the opportunities and curriculum in Arts and Sciences.

翻译:在文理学院,好奇心将成为你的向导。讨论你对学习的热情是如何影响你的学术旅程的,哪些领域或专业让你兴奋,以及为什么。你的回答应该传达你的兴趣如何与学院保持一致,以及你将如何利用艺术和科学的机会和课程。

4.SC Johnson商学院

What kind of a business student are you?Using your personal,academic,or volunteer/work experiences,describe the topics or issues that you care about and why they are important to you.Your response should convey how your interests align with the school to which you are applying within the Cornell SC Johnson College of Business(Charles H.Dyson School of Applied Economics and Management or the Peter and Stephanie Nolan School of Hotel Administration).

翻译:你是什么样的商科学生?利用你的个人、学术或志愿者/工作经历,描述你关心的话题或问题,以及为什么它们对你很重要。

5.工程学院

申请工程学院的申请生都需要写两篇补充文书,对于Essay 1,所有的申请生都要写;对于Essay 2,则可以在问题A/B中进行选择。

Essay 1:Required response.(250-word limit)

How do your interests directly connect with Cornell Engineering?If you have an intended major,what draws you to that department at Cornell Engineering?If you are unsure what specific engineering field you would like to study,describe how your general interest in engineering most directly connects with Cornell Engineering.It may be helpful to concentrate on one or two things that you are most excited about.

翻译:你的兴趣与康奈尔工程有何直接联系?如果你有一个预定的专业,是什么吸引你去康奈尔工程学院的那个系?如果你不确定自己想学习哪个特定的工程领域,请描述一下你对工程的普遍兴趣与康奈尔工程是如何最直接地联系在一起的。专注于一两件你最兴奋的事情可能会有所帮助。

Essay 2:Choose either Question A and Question B.(250-word limit)

Question A:Describe an engineering problem that impacts your local community.This could be your school,neighborhood,town,region,or a group you identify with.Describe one to three things you might do as an engineer to solve the problem.

翻译:问题A:描述一个影响当地社区的工程问题。这可能是你的学校、社区、城镇、地区或你认同的群体。描述一下你作为一名工程师可能会做的一到三件事来解决这个问题。

Question B:Diversity in all forms is intrinsic to excellence in engineering.Engineering the best solutions to complex problems is often achieved by drawing from the diverse ingenuity of people from different backgrounds,lived experiences,and identities.How do you see yourself contributing to the diversity and/or the inclusion of the Cornell Engineering community?What is the unique voice you would bring to the Cornell Engineering community?

翻译:问题B:各种形式的多样性是工程卓越的本质。设计复杂问题的最佳解决方案通常是通过借鉴来自不同背景、生活经历和身份的人的不同智慧来实现的。你认为自己如何为康奈尔工程社区的多样性和/或包容性做出贡献?你会给康奈尔工程界带来什么独特的声音?

6.人类生态学院

How have your related experiences influenced your decision to apply to the College of Human Ecology(CHE)?How will your choice of major impact your goals and plans for the future?Your response should show us that your interests and aspirations align with CHE and your choice of major.(Refer to our essay application tips before you begin.)

翻译:你的相关经历是如何影响你决定申请人类生态学院的?你的专业选择将如何影响你未来的目标和计划?你的回答应该向我们表明你的兴趣和愿望与CHE和你选择的专业是一致的。(在开始之前,请参考我们的论文申请技巧。)

7.工业和劳动关系学院

Using your personal,academic,or volunteer/work experiences,describe the topics or issues that you care about and why they are important to you.Your response should show us that your interests align with the ILR School.

翻译:用你的个人、学术或志愿者/工作经历,描述你关心的话题或问题,以及为什么它们对你很重要。您的回复应该向我们表明您的兴趣与ILR学院一致。

塔夫茨大学补充文书

塔夫茨大学针对文理学院/工程学院和美术馆学院(SMFA)给出了不同的题目:

申请文理学院(The School of Arts&Sciences)及工程学院(The School of Engineering)的学生,以下三道题目任选其一,要求200-250 Words:

It’s cool to love learning.What excites your intellectual curiosity and why?

翻译:热爱学习是件很酷的事情。什么激发了你对学术的好奇心,求知欲?为什么?

How have the environments or experiences of your upbringing–your family,home,neighborhood,or community–shaped the person you are today?

翻译:你的成长环境及体验(家庭、邻里或社群)如何塑造了现在的你?

Using a specific example or two,tell us about a way that you contributed to building a collaborative and/or inclusive community.

翻译:用一两个具体的例子告诉我们你是如何对建造一个合作的、包容性的社群做出贡献的?

申请美术学院The School of the Museum of Fine Arts(SMFA)的学生,需要回答下面的题目,要求200-250 Words:

Art has the power to disrupt our preconceptions,shape public discourse,and imagine new ways of being in the world.What are the ideas you’d like to explore in your work?

翻译:艺术拥有打破预设、塑造公共讨论、提供对于新世界想象的能力。你在自己的创作中想要探索哪些想法呢?

针对所有申请者,塔夫茨大学还希望能回答下面这个问题,要求100 words or less:

“I am applying to Tufts because…”

翻译:“我申请塔夫茨大学是因为……”

如果你能看到这里,小编必须要给你鼓掌了!

但是,请你一定记住,文书该写什么?这个问题没有“正确答案”或“标准范文”,正如耶鲁大学本科招生办公室副主任Keith Light曾说:”对我而言,文书像是电影的开场或是一本书的第一页——它建立的是我们对申请者的第一印象,我们都会用欣赏的眼光阅读每一篇文书。”

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